Writing Sample November 2013

Old Story:

Long ago, a beautiful school girl called Sally Morgan (aka Sal) once lived in a three story house that was coloured white. She was about 10 years of age and was living with her older sister Kelly and mother Mrs Morgan. Mrs Morgan was married to a 32 year old man named Matthew Harley. He had moved to Sydney Australia for a new job.

One cold rainy night, her mother yelled “SALLY ROSE MORGAN PLEASE GO TO BED!!!” “Yes mother” she replied. Sal snuggled in her warm cozy flowery blanket. As the hours went past, she was deep sleep dreaming about unicorns and fairies. A tiny whisper destroyed her weird dream.

She felt a cold breeze come out of no where. “Mum!?” She quietly said as she waited for a reply. Sally tip toed down the hallway to her mothers room. She was a few steps away. She heard a whisper coming from the basement as the door opened with a creaky sound. Sal quickly looked back noticing no-body there.

She walked down the basement door and heard more whispering. “Who’s there?” She asked hearing even more whispering. It was saying her name. “Sally, Sally, Sally.” “It sounds like, like?” “BOOO!” She got a massive fright as her older sister scared her. “Ha, payback for telling mum I failed my writing test!” “KELLY!” Sally shouted in argued.







Improved Story!

Long ago, a beautiful school girl called Sally Morgan (aka Sal) once lived in a three story house that was coloured white. She was about 10 years of age and was living with her older sister Kelly and her mother Mrs Morgan. Mrs Morgan was married to a 32 year old man named Matthew Harley. He had moved to Sydney Australia for a new job.

One cold rainy night, Sal's mother yelled “SALLY ROSE MORGAN PLEASE GO TO BED!!!” “Yes mother” she replied. Sal snuggled into her warm cosy flowery blanket and felt super comfortable. As the hours went by, she was in deep sleep dreaming about unicorns and fairies. A tiny whisper destroyed her weird dream.

She felt a cold breeze come out of no where. “Mum!?” She quietly said as she waited for a reply. Sally tip toed down the hallway to her mothers room. She was a few steps away. She heard a whisper coming from the basement as the door opened with a creaky sound. Sal quickly looked back noticing no-body there.

She walked down the basement steps and heard more whispering. “Who’s there?” She asked hearing even more whispering. It was saying her name. “Sally, Sally, Sally.” “It sounds like, like?” “BOOO!” She got a massive fright as her older sister scared her. “Ha, payback for telling mum I failed my writing test!” “KELLY!” Sally shouted in anger.

They argued and argued like normal sisters do and then all of a sudden, the hallway light switch went on. A shadow appeared on the wooden dusty floor. It got closer and closer and closer. Sally slowly closed the basement door. "Why did you close it?" Kelly asked her sister. "Its a robot, sent from the future to destroy all humanity." Sal whispered "You and your imagination." Kelly said quietly to Sally. The door opened and appeared in the light was their mother. "SALLY ROSE MORGAN PLEASE GO TO BED!!!" THE END:)